So, music cluing…
The score clues in this tournament were generally extremely unhelpful. In this post, I'm going to go through quite a few of them in some detail. I'm doing this not in the spirit of complaining about all the early buzzes I could have had, had things been written better, but rather in the hopes that this will be helpful for any of you who choose to include score clues in some of your music-question writing, or for any of you who ever need to edit music questions for a packet-submission tournament. (Even if you are a music editor who prefers to use comparatively few score clues, you should know how to deal with them when they arise in submissions.)
Actually, the first thing that I should say applies to writing questions in general. We have a habit of calling unhelpful lead-ins "vague". But I think there are actually several forms of vagueness that get conflated here, and it's good to untangle them:
1. Inaccuracy: Quite obviously, the worst form of lead-in is one where the information is unhelpful because it is not technically correct. It's quite possible for the clue itself to be a well-moment; perhaps the clue even causes a player to think of the correct work, but the inaccuracy causes him to hesitate from buzzing.
2. Unimportance/Unmemorability: Probably the second worst kind of lead-in is a moment that is simply unimportant to the work being clued. But there is a second kind of clue that is pervasive, and I'm sure you all recognize it when I describe it: the lead-in that you could never buzz-in, but which you are instantly able to recognize retrospectively. These lead-ins are therefore a problem of clue selection, rather than of clue execution. These moments should simply not be clued.
3. Lack of Detail/Context: These, on the other hand, are clues that fail in execution. It could be that not enough information is given to make the clue uniquely identifiable, but the really common problem is that not enough information is given to trigger a buzz. Or it may not even be a lack of information, so much as an emphasis on the wrong information.
The quality that I believe is possessed by all good early clues is "evocativeness", i.e. the ability to evoke a memory. An evocative clue cannot have any of the above-stated three problems: it must be accurate, important, and detailed. The question then is how do we make score clues evocative? I would now like to talk about why the music clues in this tournament failed to be evocative, and I will try to offer suggestions (where possible) of how they could have been improved, so that editors who receive questions like these can know how to edit them accordingly.
Packet 1
This piece’s first section is a grave sinfonia that repeats a dotted quarter – eighth motif; that section is followed by two recitatives for tenor.
As Jacob pointed out, the first part of this clue is non-uniquely identifying: it would apply to literally any Baroque piece that possesses an overture. Lesson one: perform reverse clue lookup if you are using a score clue. But, lesson two: even if this didn't refer to every single Baroque overture, it should obviously raise a red flag; how could an extremely common tempo marking and rhythm amount to an evocative clue? The last part of this clue is simply inaccurate. That section is followed by one recitative and one aria for tenor. When hearing this, I refrained from buzzing with Messiah (I had been sitting on it because the first clue suggested something British, and I now suspected that it has to be a Baroque piece with an overture), because I knew that the second major thing after the overture is definitely not a recitative.
Packet 2
another of his works begins with a pp descending quarter, dotted-eighth, sixteenth motif in the violas and cellos, which are soon joined by the violins.
How is anyone supposed to buzz on this? Completely un-evocative: just a dynamic marking and a common rhythm. I guess I know that this piece begins quietly and has strings now, but that's it.
Packet 3
At the beginning of one of the tracks on this album, the ensemble alternates between B-flat minor seventh chords and E-flat minor chords; the saxophone soloist then enters with a melody that features a rising dotted-eighth, sixteenth motif.
Arranging the chords in pyramidal order rather than the order in which they appeared prevented me from buzzing. I thought was looking for a piece in B-flat minor that was alternating between i7 and iv, when I should have been looking for a piece that alternates between i and v7. I most certainly would have buzzed had I attempted to hear this with E-flat minor as the tonic.
Look at how useless these rhythm clues are: the clue in this tossup is "rising dotted-eighth, sixteenth motif" and the clue in the previous tossups was "descending quarter, dotted-eighth, sixteenth motif", and the clue in the previous is "dotted quarter - eighth". Lesson: never clue a motif from its rhythm unless you have a good reason to believe that the rhythm is unique or important. In general, a true statement about something in the score is not automatically a clue; it might just be a piece of description that provides little to no vita information.
The first piece of that “collection of 12 impressions” is an A minor “Evocation,”
Nope. That's in A-flat minor. Were you for some reason listening/reading the orchestral transcription instead? Or did you just miss the key signature? Regardless, lesson: pieces get re-arranged all the time. If you're cluing from the score, make sure it's the original version.
Packet 4
Inspector Javert
Did you seriously count this as Fine Arts rather than Trash? Are you kidding me? In a broader cultural sense, you could not pick a better example of a musical that exists purely as a pop cultural phenomenon, rather than as a part of fine arts. But limiting ourselves to quizbowl critera, what on earth made you think this should be considered anything other than Trash?
One work by this composer introduces two harp parts in the 3/8 second movement, in which they enter after some string tremolos by playing rising triplet sixteenths on the F major triad.
I personally was not able to buzz on this, though this is probably the best of these score clues so far. But, let us say that this was a clue in a tossup submitted to me. What would I do? First, I would check the score to see if it's accurate. I would find that it is slightly misleading: it suggests that both harps enter after the string tremolos, both playing a rising F major triad. This is not the case: they enter one at a time, only one of them playing the F major arpeggios.
I now want to assess the importance of the information: is the fact the rhythm is triplet sixteenths or the fact that the chord is F major remotely helpful? The answer to that is clearly "no", and so I would eliminate that. What's important is that this second movement opens with string tremolos and then rising harp arpeggios, and that the two harps are appearing for the first time in this movement.
Now, I want to consider what details/context are needed to make this evocative. Is the mere mention of this feature enough to trigger buzzes: maybe some. How can I improve upon this, though? The way I can do so is by providing the player with a foothold. Right now, if you were trying to "figure out" this score clue, it's not clear what piece of information you would use as your entry point. Do you first consider pieces with harps, and the try and thinks which one of them has a second movement in 3/8? That would be difficult. No, to make this more buzzable I want to contextualize this within a larger genre. I have two options: the piece is a symphony and the movement is a waltz.
Let's say that I take the first option. I then rewrite this clue as: "The second movement of a symphony by this composer opens with string tremolos followed by rising arpeggios in two harps, marking the harps' first appearance in the work."
Let's say that I take the second option. I then rewrite this clue as: "A waltz movement in 3/8 time by this composer opens with string tremolos followed by rising arpeggios in two harps, marking the harps' first appearance in the larger work to which the movement belongs."
Note that I included the time signature in the second clue. Most waltzes are in 3/4, so telling a player that this waltz is in 3/8 should help them immediately start narrowing their thought process to waltzes not in 3/4. On the other hand, there's nothing inherently attention-grabbing about a second movement in 3/8. Note also that I said "waltz movement" to steer a player away from looking for stand-alone waltzes. I would not want to begin "The second movement of a symphony by this composer is a waltz…" because that makes it too easy.
Of these two options, I think the first is an easier clue. But which I'd choose would entirely depend on the depth of lead-in I had chosen in other tossups.
Packet 5
This composer wrote a piece whose first section begins in 6/4 but switches to 6/8 before a solo flute introduces the melody in sixteenth triplets; the third section of that work is marked “lively and tumultuous” and begins with trills on C for the timpani.
First, of all: stop describing movements as sections! Terminological vagueness makes things harder. Is the first clue supposed to be the opening movement of La Mer? If so, what solo flute melody are you talking about? Also, there's no such thing as a timpani trill.
The fourth and last section of a piano suite by this composer is in F sharp minor and begins with many bars of staccato arpeggios in the left hand; that is the (*) “Passepied” of a suite that begins with a “Prelude” and “Menuet.”
"Begins with many bars of staccato arpeggios in the left hand" is not a helpful clue, especially when by "many" you apparently mean "two".
Packet 6
This piece’s F minor fourth movement begins with two bars of tremolo Ds in the low strings before the second violin enters with a series of pianissimo staccato eighths
Were this clue true, it might be helpful, as starting a piece in F minor on a D tremolo would be odd (even so, the not super-uncommon phenomenon of contrasting tremolo and staccato eighths is not exactly going to set me buzzing). Of course, this clue is not true because the piece starts on a D-flat.
Packet 7
The prelude to this opera begins with a three beat pickup as the double reeds and strings play a slow A flat arpeggio to begin the love feast motif.
In a gusty move, I buzzed on this even before the words "love feast", though the prelude does not begin with a three-beat pickup. Don't use technical terms like "pickup" unless they actually apply.
Packet 9
One work by this composer begins with single tone eighth notes before adding a second, third, and fourth tone to the eighth notes on the bass clef; that piece starts with an Allegro vivace (quasi presto) section in 3/8.
Unbuzzable gobbledygook. It took my looking at the beginning of every piece mentioned in the tossup to figure out that this is supposed to be the opening of the Mephisto Waltz. Not until I saw the score did I have any idea what you were trying to say. Even had you phrased it perfectly (and I don't know how you could have), this cannot possibly be a useful clue.
In this opera, two characters decide to marry in a song beginning, “there is beauty in the belly of the beast.”
The quote is "There is beauty in the bellow of the blast". How you managed to get two of the three key words of the title wrong is beyond me. At this point, I was jaded enough by this tournament's lead-ins that I buzzed anyway.
Packet 11
The nobilmente e semplice first movement of one work by this composer has a long thematic introduction in A flat, but then shifts to D minor; that is this composer’s Symphony No. 1, one of very few symphonies in A flat major.
Will Nediger and I buzzer-raced on the twelfth word of this tossup. Not a smart choice of lead-in clue.
This a lot of problems for tossups in one category of a single tournament. I hope you correct these before any future mirrors. And I hope my extended commentary on the things like the Berlioz question and my prefatory comments are helpful to you and to other music writers/editors, so these kinds of clues can be avoided in future.